Poems (3) by me. - Blizzard Sector

eh.spoon · 07-21-2007, 03:47 PM

Well hello! It is very delightful to be apart of BS.
I'm new here, so I figured posting some of my poetry would be a nice idea.

-Kyle Sisneros
"Sights We Cannot See"
Settled on transparent tree tops
Placid flakes of snow,
A sight I cannot see
Only something that I know.
Like the infinite air we breathe
And bringer of days life
Young dawns that rise!
Replacer of the nights.

And though bare I did not
Witness to the seas of blue!
Painted on their canvas
That we lie between,
I and you.

Nor did either eye
Notice the stars circled in
Vast space.
The mountains, forests and oceans
Placed in their perfect place.

These sights I cannot see
Only something that I know
Like the infinite love we hold
Patient to be shown.

-Kyle Sisneros
"The Desert I'm Lost In"
Blisters to my canopy,
As heaven to my hell.
Sweet as sin is she
For, to her, my heart has fell.
And illusions raise false hope,
As drink to quench athirst
For her water's polluted with taupe
Were clear as crystal first,
While no remorse is passed
As no memory forgotten.
Until death takes life at last,
She is the desert I'm lost in.

-Kyle Sisneros
"Stages of Morning"
Dew forms and settles
On the green of new morning
Enlighting me

Volcanoes erupt
Birds sing and flowers, they dance
Between her and I

Laughter, hugs, kisses
Moments of remembrance
Beautiful was life

Swiftly cunning, she
In a bind I lay to die
Awaiting release

I hope ya dig it =]
-Kyle

P.S.
All of my poetry is legally copyrighted and protected by a lawyer.
Not that it's worth a legal case, but I would prefer to have a stamp if any of my poetry is to be shared from this website in relation to having to take it to court.
I'm sorry buy my poetry is a big part of my life and it's extremely disrespectful to steal someone's inner most thoughts and emotions and mark them as your own.

**Frai7ty** · 07-21-2007, 09:10 PM

I enjoyed the first one the most out of the three. I believe that it has the best flow as it where. However I enjoyed all three of you poems, very good work :)

eh.spoon · 07-21-2007, 10:16 PM

Thanks yah very much =]

**Pamela** · 07-22-2007, 05:52 PM

I liked them all as well but the second one the most ^^ Good work!! Post more of them please.

eh.spoon · 07-22-2007, 07:16 PM

=] Thank you.
I have more of my poetry on myspace (url in profile).

Here's another one:

-Kyle Sisneros
"Their Shadows Walking"
Their shadows, they walk the ground
Making none but whispy sounds
We hear them before we pass to sleep
We see them before our tears we weep
Oh, what more can one desire, but
The thirll of love when our flesh it cuts

But a time ago, when all was well
I held someone that I could tell
My utmost clever and secret things
And kiss away the tears life brings
And walk me through my darkest nights
And take me close through all my fights
Though now it seems but just a dream
My shadows walking, my memories

**Pamela** · 07-22-2007, 09:41 PM

This was evocative and seemed to say a deep love but lost as a shadow.

**KazeCloud** · 07-23-2007, 02:04 AM

AH YES. Now this is better than those other love poems that was about the same thing over and over again. "Ill take care of you forever would you too???" That kinda stuff. Magnificent. I loved it.

eh.spoon · 07-23-2007, 12:56 PM

Heya, thanks a lot.
It's the positive feedback that keeps my pencil to paper.
Much appreciated =D

**KazeCloud** · 07-23-2007, 05:51 PM

Very nice use of imagery.

**Pamela** · 07-23-2007, 08:08 PM

I concure ,very nice wording that brought images to mind and made emotions swirl. I think you have talent,so do not stop.

May I suggest you also attempt a short story? They are fun to write and a creative mind such as your own would find it interesting.

Give it a shot,I would like to read the result.

eh.spoon · 07-25-2007, 04:06 AM

Great idea.. I did write a story poem once, not exactly a short story but more like a story in a poem. haha. I'll have to find it and post it up.

07-21-2007, 03:47 PM	#1 (permalink)
eh.spoon Status: Newcomer Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: an orange. Posts: 22 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 0 Spent time on board: 6:55:49 Hours Rep Power: 2	Well hello! It is very delightful to be apart of BS. I'm new here, so I figured posting some of my poetry would be a nice idea. -Kyle Sisneros "Sights We Cannot See" Settled on transparent tree tops Placid flakes of snow, A sight I cannot see Only something that I know. Like the infinite air we breathe And bringer of days life Young dawns that rise! Replacer of the nights. And though bare I did not Witness to the seas of blue! Painted on their canvas That we lie between, I and you. Nor did either eye Notice the stars circled in Vast space. The mountains, forests and oceans Placed in their perfect place. These sights I cannot see Only something that I know Like the infinite love we hold Patient to be shown. -Kyle Sisneros "The Desert I'm Lost In" Blisters to my canopy, As heaven to my hell. Sweet as sin is she For, to her, my heart has fell. And illusions raise false hope, As drink to quench athirst For her water's polluted with taupe Were clear as crystal first, While no remorse is passed As no memory forgotten. Until death takes life at last, She is the desert I'm lost in. -Kyle Sisneros "Stages of Morning" Dew forms and settles On the green of new morning Enlighting me Volcanoes erupt Birds sing and flowers, they dance Between her and I Laughter, hugs, kisses Moments of remembrance Beautiful was life Swiftly cunning, she In a bind I lay to die Awaiting release I hope ya dig it =] -Kyle P.S. All of my poetry is legally copyrighted and protected by a lawyer. Not that it's worth a legal case, but I would prefer to have a stamp if any of my poetry is to be shared from this website in relation to having to take it to court. I'm sorry buy my poetry is a big part of my life and it's extremely disrespectful to steal someone's inner most thoughts and emotions and mark them as your own. Last edited by eh.spoon; 07-23-2007 at 07:27 PM..

07-21-2007, 09:10 PM	#2 (permalink)
Frai7ty Status: Veteran Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Eugene, Oregon Posts: 424 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 189 Spent time on board: 3 Days and 4:42:33 Hours Rep Power: 3	I enjoyed the first one the most out of the three. I believe that it has the best flow as it where. However I enjoyed all three of you poems, very good work :) __________________ Guide to Computer Themes

07-22-2007, 05:52 PM	#4 (permalink)
Pamela Status: A Light in your Darkness Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Florida Posts: 5,318 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 382 Spent time on board: :0:0 Hours Rep Power: 16	I liked them all as well but the second one the most ^^ Good work!! Post more of them please. __________________ A Light in your Darkness...always there...and burning!!

07-22-2007, 09:41 PM	#6 (permalink)
Pamela Status: A Light in your Darkness Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Florida Posts: 5,318 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 382 Spent time on board: :0:0 Hours Rep Power: 16	This was evocative and seemed to say a deep love but lost as a shadow. __________________ A Light in your Darkness...always there...and burning!!

07-23-2007, 02:04 AM	#7 (permalink)
KazeCloud Status: *** Elder Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Stockton, California Posts: 1,221** Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 340 Spent time on board: 1 Week, 0 Days and 3:23:37 Hours Rep Power: 4	AH YES. Now this is better than those other love poems that was about the same thing over and over again. "Ill take care of you forever would you too???" That kinda stuff. Magnificent. I loved it. __________________ Please add to my Reputation if you find my post reasonable, beneficial, or helpful. Thanks. =]

07-21-2007, 10:16 PM	#3 (permalink)
eh.spoon Status: Newcomer Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: an orange. Posts: 22 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 0 Spent time on board: 6:55:49 Hours Rep Power: 2	Thanks yah very much =]

07-22-2007, 07:16 PM	#5 (permalink)
eh.spoon Status: Newcomer Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: an orange. Posts: 22 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 0 Spent time on board: 6:55:49 Hours Rep Power: 2	=] Thank you. I have more of my poetry on myspace (url in profile). Here's another one: -Kyle Sisneros "Their Shadows Walking" Their shadows, they walk the ground Making none but whispy sounds We hear them before we pass to sleep We see them before our tears we weep Oh, what more can one desire, but The thirll of love when our flesh it cuts But a time ago, when all was well I held someone that I could tell My utmost clever and secret things And kiss away the tears life brings And walk me through my darkest nights And take me close through all my fights Though now it seems but just a dream My shadows walking, my memories

07-23-2007, 12:56 PM	#8 (permalink)
eh.spoon Status: Newcomer Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: an orange. Posts: 22 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 0 Spent time on board: 6:55:49 Hours Rep Power: 2	Heya, thanks a lot. It's the positive feedback that keeps my pencil to paper. Much appreciated =D Last edited by eh.spoon; 07-23-2007 at 01:04 PM..

07-23-2007, 05:51 PM	#9 (permalink)
KazeCloud Status: *** Elder Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Stockton, California Posts: 1,221** Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 340 Spent time on board: 1 Week, 0 Days and 3:23:37 Hours Rep Power: 4	Very nice use of imagery. __________________ Please add to my Reputation if you find my post reasonable, beneficial, or helpful. Thanks. =]

07-23-2007, 08:08 PM	#10 (permalink)
Pamela Status: A Light in your Darkness Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Florida Posts: 5,318 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 382 Spent time on board: Weeks, Days and :0:0 Hours Rep Power: 16	I concure ,very nice wording that brought images to mind and made emotions swirl. I think you have talent,so do not stop. May I suggest you also attempt a short story? They are fun to write and a creative mind such as your own would find it interesting. Give it a shot,I would like to read the result. __________________ A Light in your Darkness...always there...and burning!!

07-25-2007, 04:06 AM	#11 (permalink)
eh.spoon Status: Newcomer Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: an orange. Posts: 22 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 0 Spent time on board: 6:55:49 Hours Rep Power: 2	Great idea.. I did write a story poem once, not exactly a short story but more like a story in a poem. haha. I'll have to find it and post it up.

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