Poem: My promise - Blizzard Sector

**Frai7ty** · 07-01-2007, 11:04 PM

My Promise
I'm here for you
To help you through.
To hold you.
To be with you.

I need to.
Culture a cure.
To mend your hart, and dreams.
To show you what love truly means.

I'll never run away.
I'll be sure to stay.
And all I can do is pray.
For you to feel the same.

And If your even in pain.
I will be there to kiss it all away.
And make you feel better again.
This is my promise to you.

I wrote this a long time ago. So sorry if it's a bit newbish. Any who, hope you all enjoy. :)

**Pamela** · 07-02-2007, 05:53 PM

I did ^^ It came from the heart...you can tell.

**Frai7ty** · 07-07-2007, 08:22 AM

Well thx Pam. Your appreciation is welcome as always.

**New-b** · 07-08-2007, 11:12 PM

That poem to me is Deep.

**AngelzUnit** · 07-19-2007, 03:57 PM

I ain't really into poetry, and I accidentally clicked here but...wow. very nice

**KazeCloud** · 07-19-2007, 06:44 PM

Nice poem but, after reading so many poems that people and my friends make because their in love, these poems are just too identical.

Heres a guys info on my buddy list on aim. He says he wrote it himself.

What if i'm always there when you need me
Will you even care
What if i promise to forever care
Will you need me

What if i tell you that your my only
Will you love me
What if i really want a chance with you
Will you let me

That was just a small part, and it uses repetition throughout. lol.

I'm just saying after a hundred poems love poems need a little more twist in it for it to be anymore interesting.

**Frai7ty** · 07-20-2007, 04:07 AM

Well thanks Kaze, I like it when people give me honest feedback. Bare in mind tho this was the *Count on Fingers* 3rd poem. It's bound to be rough around the edges. Still tho, thanks :)

07-01-2007, 11:04 PM	#1 (permalink)
Frai7ty Status: Veteran Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Eugene, Oregon Posts: 424 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 189 Spent time on board: 3 Days and 4:42:33 Hours Rep Power: 3	My Promise I'm here for you To help you through. To hold you. To be with you. I need to. Culture a cure. To mend your hart, and dreams. To show you what love truly means. I'll never run away. I'll be sure to stay. And all I can do is pray. For you to feel the same. And If your even in pain. I will be there to kiss it all away. And make you feel better again. This is my promise to you. I wrote this a long time ago. So sorry if it's a bit newbish. Any who, hope you all enjoy. :) __________________ Guide to Computer Themes

07-02-2007, 05:53 PM	#2 (permalink)
Pamela Status: A Light in your Darkness Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Florida Posts: 5,318 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 382 Spent time on board: Days and :0:0 Hours Rep Power: 16	I did ^^ It came from the heart...you can tell. __________________ A Light in your Darkness...always there...and burning!!

07-07-2007, 08:22 AM	#3 (permalink)
Frai7ty Status: Veteran Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Eugene, Oregon Posts: 424 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 189 Spent time on board: 3 Days and 4:42:33 Hours Rep Power: 3	Well thx Pam. Your appreciation is welcome as always. __________________ Guide to Computer Themes

07-19-2007, 03:57 PM	#5 (permalink)
AngelzUnit Status: Veteran Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Guyana, South America Posts: 178 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 25 Spent time on board: 2 Days and 8:40:11 Hours Rep Power: 3	I ain't really into poetry, and I accidentally clicked here but...wow. very nice __________________ Thanks FrogMan for the Sig!

07-19-2007, 06:44 PM	#6 (permalink)
KazeCloud Status: *** Elder Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Stockton, California Posts: 1,221** Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 340 Spent time on board: 1 Week, 0 Days and 3:23:37 Hours Rep Power: 4	Nice poem but, after reading so many poems that people and my friends make because their in love, these poems are just too identical. Heres a guys info on my buddy list on aim. He says he wrote it himself. What if i'm always there when you need me Will you even care What if i promise to forever care Will you need me What if i tell you that your my only Will you love me What if i really want a chance with you Will you let me That was just a small part, and it uses repetition throughout. lol. I'm just saying after a hundred poems love poems need a little more twist in it for it to be anymore interesting. __________________ Please add to my Reputation if you find my post reasonable, beneficial, or helpful. Thanks. =]

07-08-2007, 11:12 PM	#4 (permalink)
New-b Status: Forum Member Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 87 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 0 Spent time on board: 4:56:26 Hours Rep Power: 3	That poem to me is Deep.

07-20-2007, 04:07 AM	#7 (permalink)
Frai7ty Status: Veteran Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Eugene, Oregon Posts: 424 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 189 Spent time on board: 3 Days and 4:42:33 Hours Rep Power: 3	Well thanks Kaze, I like it when people give me honest feedback. Bare in mind tho this was the Count on Fingers 3rd poem. It's bound to be rough around the edges. Still tho, thanks :) __________________ Guide to Computer Themes

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