Poem: The Darkness - Blizzard Sector

**Frai7ty** · 09-07-2006, 04:59 AM

All I see are lies, they hold no truth.
All I see is shadows, shadows of life.
Now I feel my soul, wooded and crying.
Seething with passion, I hold its hand.
Falling from grace, I can hardly stay standing.
But I must, for it is my duty.
Stand high and proud form all to see.
For any sigh of weakness, means I will fall.

I feel anathema to this world.
I feel as tho I shouldn’t belong.
All I can do, is help who I can.
For I can be strong for everyone.

All I see are your lies.
All I see is your false life.
What you are I do not know.
As long you haunt me, I shall stand.
For it is what I must do.
Because I am the only one who is able.

You give me nightmares, and madness.
You show me my failings.
Not any longer, for I won’t let you.
Get out of my life, I need you to leave.
If you do not, I will make you.
For you have no power over me.

All I see is truth, shining and pure.
All I see is life, brilliant with passion.
Now I see my soul, joyous and happy.
But you are still here, in all of your darkness.
Still here, to remind me of my sins.
I am glad that you are still with me.
Because, it means that I am still humble.

I hope you never leave.

**Pamela** · 09-07-2006, 12:54 PM

Excellent prose style writing. To convey strong emotions and passion it is not always a requirement that the verses rhyme. The point of poetry is to get accross to the reader the depth of the writers feelings. This sir you did very well.I took it as wanting to rid the pain,but not the lesson learned.A soul tortured,a heart broken,but a lesson learned you do not wish to forget.
This is what the poem conveyed to me...others might see it a bit differently,however,for myself this is what it was saying.

**Frai7ty** · 09-08-2006, 01:00 AM

Thank you. I take much pride in your complament.

**PoTatoes** · 09-08-2006, 01:36 AM

nice..gives me the chills

Cr187 · 09-09-2006, 02:25 PM

Cool poem, I liked it a lot.

**Pamela** · 09-10-2006, 05:18 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Frai7ty

Thank you. I take much pride in your complament.

You are very welcome.

The compliment was meant,and the poetry was excellent.Please keep it coming!

09-07-2006, 04:59 AM	#1 (permalink)
Frai7ty Status: Veteran Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Eugene, Oregon Posts: 424 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 189 Spent time on board: 3 Days and 4:42:33 Hours Rep Power: 3	All I see are lies, they hold no truth. All I see is shadows, shadows of life. Now I feel my soul, wooded and crying. Seething with passion, I hold its hand. Falling from grace, I can hardly stay standing. But I must, for it is my duty. Stand high and proud form all to see. For any sigh of weakness, means I will fall. I feel anathema to this world. I feel as tho I shouldn’t belong. All I can do, is help who I can. For I can be strong for everyone. All I see are your lies. All I see is your false life. What you are I do not know. As long you haunt me, I shall stand. For it is what I must do. Because I am the only one who is able. You give me nightmares, and madness. You show me my failings. Not any longer, for I won’t let you. Get out of my life, I need you to leave. If you do not, I will make you. For you have no power over me. All I see is truth, shining and pure. All I see is life, brilliant with passion. Now I see my soul, joyous and happy. But you are still here, in all of your darkness. Still here, to remind me of my sins. I am glad that you are still with me. Because, it means that I am still humble. I hope you never leave. __________________ Guide to Computer Themes

09-07-2006, 12:54 PM	#2 (permalink)
Pamela Status: A Light in your Darkness Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Florida Posts: 5,318 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 382 Spent time on board: Days and :0:0 Hours Rep Power: 16	Excellent prose style writing. To convey strong emotions and passion it is not always a requirement that the verses rhyme. The point of poetry is to get accross to the reader the depth of the writers feelings. This sir you did very well.I took it as wanting to rid the pain,but not the lesson learned.A soul tortured,a heart broken,but a lesson learned you do not wish to forget. This is what the poem conveyed to me...others might see it a bit differently,however,for myself this is what it was saying. __________________ A Light in your Darkness...always there...and burning!!

09-08-2006, 01:00 AM	#3 (permalink)
Frai7ty Status: Veteran Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Eugene, Oregon Posts: 424 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 189 Spent time on board: 3 Days and 4:42:33 Hours Rep Power: 3	Thank you. I take much pride in your complament. __________________ Guide to Computer Themes

09-08-2006, 01:36 AM	#4 (permalink)
PoTatoes Status: Forum Ancient Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Arcasia Posts: 1,925 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 51 Spent time on board: 18:38:56 Hours Rep Power: 6	nice..gives me the chills Last edited by PoTatoes; 09-08-2006 at 01:46 AM..

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09-09-2006, 02:25 PM	#5 (permalink)
Cr187 Status: Newcomer Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Green Bay Posts: 47 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 150 Spent time on board: 0:22:14 Hours Rep Power: 3	Cool poem, I liked it a lot.