Foog's first poem ever - Blizzard Sector

**Foog** · 02-18-2005, 03:35 AM

Dedicated to my lovely Brittany.

We fit together so well
That sometimes I wonder
If God did put me here for you,
To love you for eternity
And hold you in my arms.
How can I profess my love
If all I've got are words?
Nothing here on this poor Earth
Can ever share my passion.
Please, my dear, listen to me say
I love you now and always
So I give my heart to you alone
To keep for all of time.

please be kind, i've never written anything before.

**Dynafrom** · 02-18-2005, 03:36 AM

Nice poem, better then anything I can ever write.

**Foog** · 02-18-2005, 03:40 AM

thanks. that was just off of the top of my head, im on the phone with her and i thought about how much i love her..
*insert soppy sonnet here*

**Obfuscate** · 02-18-2005, 03:55 AM

I'm not trying to be mean but it "sounds" like a shakespearan love sonnet. Which is good. Just lacks the far reaching imagery that a good love sonnet should have. Need more metaphors and similies(SP?). Good for a first go though.

**Foog** · 02-18-2005, 04:11 PM

thanks

**Crown** · 02-18-2005, 09:12 PM

See if you can extend it any further. If you could, that's already a great start.

**Grave** · 02-18-2005, 09:15 PM

very nice poem i am very bad at poetry but you completely created it or you used some reference? just wondering i love the poem

**Foog** · 02-18-2005, 09:16 PM

let me point out that thgrave, your signature says thEgrave. just so you know, and its 2005...eh?

yeah, i made all of this up...heres the second half of it. is this final enough, sinner? thanks for all of your upcoming and pas topinions, guys.

Perfection doesn't begin to describe you,
You who so easily fills that void...
I know now what the only thing could be.
It's got to be love, it has to be that
As nothing else can do what you've done for me!
People tell me that I'm too young to love,
But I know inside that that cannot be true.
All it takes to see your love for me
Is to see you look deep into my eyes,
And empty your soul to me.
You've never done this for anyone before
So I know it's got to be special.
I guess what I'm trying to say
Is that I'm grateful God sent me to you
Because since the day we forged the bond...

I've never been the same.

**Grave** · 02-18-2005, 09:27 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by foog

let me point out that thgrave, your signature says thEgrave. just so you know, and its 2005...eh?

i know i have made this signature for gfxgamers site where my name is thegrave2005 :) dont worry its mine i have created it
about the 1/2 half it sounds like your desperate about this girl it is very nice compared to anything i have ever made. i should start poetry

**Foog** · 02-18-2005, 09:35 PM

i am quite desperate for her, just ask UGM. look at my user title >_< she's everything to me.

**Crown** · 02-18-2005, 09:47 PM

Pretty good foog, I like it. Definetly good for a first.

**liquidshaggy** · 02-19-2005, 12:18 AM

ha poem

**Foog** · 02-19-2005, 03:57 AM

Thanks crown.

shag, stop spamming. unless you've got something important to say, or something someone'd care about, dont post...

**erizoe** · 02-21-2005, 01:13 AM

I don;t particulary (i cant spell) like love poems but that was a great one. I can't write for sh!t so don't be offended

**AmourAffair** · 02-21-2005, 01:52 AM

That was a really good poem and is worthy of being published.

You better be effin proud of yourself.

**Foog** · 02-21-2005, 03:33 PM

you really think so? i just thought that up on the spur of the moment...thanks.

**AmourAffair** · 02-21-2005, 03:42 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by foog

you really think so? i just thought that up on the spur of the moment...thanks.

Yes, I do. I really think you did an awesome job on it and keep writing more "spur of the moment" kind of poems. You do good work, and you should definetly be proud of yourself, like I said before. :

**Foog** · 02-22-2005, 04:38 PM

Thanks. I'll be back with more, if the urge hits me >_<

should i stick with arhyming? or should i try to rhyme them...

**liquidshaggy** · 02-23-2005, 08:15 PM

sry it's a good poem i think

**Foog** · 02-23-2005, 08:17 PM

why are you apologizing?

02-18-2005, 03:55 AM	#4 (permalink)
Obfuscate Status: Bro Rapist Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Somewhere near something next to this and that Posts: 2,174 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 82 Spent time on board: 2 Days and 22:51:33 Hours Rep Power: 8	I'm not trying to be mean but it "sounds" like a shakespearan love sonnet. Which is good. Just lacks the far reaching imagery that a good love sonnet should have. Need more metaphors and similies(SP?). Good for a first go though. __________________ "One murder makes a villain, millions a hero. " - Beilby Porteus, Death, A Poem

02-18-2005, 09:15 PM	#7 (permalink)
Grave Status: *** Ancient Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: Brooklyn, NY Posts: 1,850** Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 72 Spent time on board: 11:54:54 Hours Rep Power: 8	very nice poem i am very bad at poetry but you completely created it or you used some reference? just wondering i love the poem __________________ http://myspace.com/dennis24k

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02-18-2005, 03:35 AM	#1 (permalink)
Foog Status: F* SLIMP Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: C:\Program Files\Adobe\Photoshop CS 2.exe Posts: 2,962** Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 30 Spent time on board: - Rep Power: 10	Dedicated to my lovely Brittany. We fit together so well That sometimes I wonder If God did put me here for you, To love you for eternity And hold you in my arms. How can I profess my love If all I've got are words? Nothing here on this poor Earth Can ever share my passion. Please, my dear, listen to me say I love you now and always So I give my heart to you alone To keep for all of time. please be kind, i've never written anything before.

02-18-2005, 03:36 AM	#2 (permalink)
Dynafrom Status: The Immortals Join Date: May 2004 Location: Markham, ONT Posts: 3,549 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 15 Spent time on board: 0:34:09 Hours Rep Power: 12	Nice poem, better then anything I can ever write.

02-18-2005, 03:40 AM	#3 (permalink)
Foog Status: F* SLIMP Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: C:\Program Files\Adobe\Photoshop CS 2.exe Posts: 2,962** Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 30 Spent time on board: - Rep Power: 10	thanks. that was just off of the top of my head, im on the phone with her and i thought about how much i love her.. insert soppy sonnet here

02-18-2005, 04:11 PM	#5 (permalink)
Foog Status: F* SLIMP Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: C:\Program Files\Adobe\Photoshop CS 2.exe Posts: 2,962** Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 30 Spent time on board: - Rep Power: 10	thanks

02-18-2005, 09:12 PM	#6 (permalink)
Crown Status: Forum Elder Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Pennsylvania Posts: 511 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 30 Spent time on board: - Rep Power: 5	See if you can extend it any further. If you could, that's already a great start.

02-18-2005, 09:16 PM	#8 (permalink)
Foog Status: F* SLIMP Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: C:\Program Files\Adobe\Photoshop CS 2.exe Posts: 2,962** Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 30 Spent time on board: - Rep Power: 10	let me point out that thgrave, your signature says thEgrave. just so you know, and its 2005...eh? yeah, i made all of this up...heres the second half of it. is this final enough, sinner? thanks for all of your upcoming and pas topinions, guys. Perfection doesn't begin to describe you, You who so easily fills that void... I know now what the only thing could be. It's got to be love, it has to be that As nothing else can do what you've done for me! People tell me that I'm too young to love, But I know inside that that cannot be true. All it takes to see your love for me Is to see you look deep into my eyes, And empty your soul to me. You've never done this for anyone before So I know it's got to be special. I guess what I'm trying to say Is that I'm grateful God sent me to you Because since the day we forged the bond... I've never been the same.

02-18-2005, 09:35 PM	#10 (permalink)
Foog Status: F* SLIMP Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: C:\Program Files\Adobe\Photoshop CS 2.exe Posts: 2,962** Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 30 Spent time on board: - Rep Power: 10	i am quite desperate for her, just ask UGM. look at my user title >_< she's everything to me.

02-18-2005, 09:47 PM	#11 (permalink)
Crown Status: Forum Elder Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Pennsylvania Posts: 511 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 30 Spent time on board: - Rep Power: 5	Pretty good foog, I like it. Definetly good for a first.

02-19-2005, 12:18 AM	#12 (permalink)
liquidshaggy Status: Veteran Join Date: Feb 2005 Posts: 167 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 150 Spent time on board: 0:02:06 Hours Rep Power: 4	ha poem

02-19-2005, 03:57 AM	#13 (permalink)
Foog Status: F* SLIMP Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: C:\Program Files\Adobe\Photoshop CS 2.exe Posts: 2,962** Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 30 Spent time on board: - Rep Power: 10	Thanks crown. shag, stop spamming. unless you've got something important to say, or something someone'd care about, dont post...

02-21-2005, 01:13 AM	#14 (permalink)
erizoe Status: Anarchist Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Cumberland, Rhode Island Posts: 976 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 64 Spent time on board: 18:01:53 Hours Rep Power: 7	I don;t particulary (i cant spell) like love poems but that was a great one. I can't write for sh!t so don't be offended

02-21-2005, 01:52 AM	#15 (permalink)
AmourAffair Status: Veteran Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Cumberland, Rhode Island [USA] Posts: 212 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 165 Spent time on board: - Rep Power: 4	That was a really good poem and is worthy of being published. You better be effin proud of yourself.

02-21-2005, 03:33 PM	#16 (permalink)
Foog Status: F* SLIMP Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: C:\Program Files\Adobe\Photoshop CS 2.exe Posts: 2,962** Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 30 Spent time on board: - Rep Power: 10	you really think so? i just thought that up on the spur of the moment...thanks.

02-22-2005, 04:38 PM	#18 (permalink)
Foog Status: F* SLIMP Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: C:\Program Files\Adobe\Photoshop CS 2.exe Posts: 2,962** Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 30 Spent time on board: - Rep Power: 10	Thanks. I'll be back with more, if the urge hits me >_< should i stick with arhyming? or should i try to rhyme them...

02-23-2005, 08:15 PM	#19 (permalink)
liquidshaggy Status: Veteran Join Date: Feb 2005 Posts: 167 Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 150 Spent time on board: 0:02:06 Hours Rep Power: 4	sry it's a good poem i think

02-23-2005, 08:17 PM	#20 (permalink)
Foog Status: F* SLIMP Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: C:\Program Files\Adobe\Photoshop CS 2.exe Posts: 2,962** Tournaments Joined: 0 Tournament Wins: 0 Credits: 30 Spent time on board: - Rep Power: 10	why are you apologizing?