| good narration although I couldn't see any rising/falling action, or a climax to this story. I think this story would be better if u titled it so u get a better setting of the story.
seems like a sad tone rainy day coming, something bad will happen but so far, the introduction doesnt seem to have a setting. where is she? what time is it? i think this compliation takes place in the middle of something there i can tell your not finished yet. a women is waiting in her room for the man to introduce him to her sister?. but still we don't know who these characters are.
But since you've said you couldnt include it, I think u should start. overall, good complication although i found it more like a sad story. the tone i dont know if it will amaze the readers, i couldnt find it interesting but overall, good.
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