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Originally Posted by Cr187  Save Me Now?
It's taking so long, I can't believe what I've done
And this pathway is too far to run
I take a wrong turn and I'm back at the start
I'm shattered and broken at heart
It's taking so long, where did I go wrong
How can I keep going if you're pulling me down?
Where's the power that would save my soul?
The ability to run when there's no place to go?
Who can save me now?
I can hear the whispers in the darkness
and I know what it is they say
They tell me this is my punishment
that not even God can keep at bay
There's no word for the darkness
No word for the fear\inside
There's no atonment for the wrongness
That I have lived with all my life
It's taking so long, where did I go wrong
How can I keep going if you're pulling me down?
Where's the power that would save my soul?
The ability to run when there's no place to go?
Who can save me now? |
This was excellent with great syntax and emotion.
The pain and confusion were well expressed,along with the sense of hopelessness.
I suggest you gather a copy of your writings and publish them.
You are talented and I would buy a poetry book from you.
Just my opinion.