| No imagery, no metaphor, no similes...No rhythm. And amatuers might as well start off rhyming because they lack the skills necessary to do w/out such a device. These poems are no better than writing a short story down on paper. In a poem, your sole purpose is to develop all of your feelings and visualize them for other people. By reading the poems, we can all tell how much you love (or loved) the one you wrote them about. However nobody here can see further than that. Nobody can relate to your struggles or successes because we can't see them in your words.
Not bad for someone who claims they never wrote before, but definitely don't start publishing your writing like our fellow members suggest you do. In other words, don't get in over your head yet, first do the work necessary to impress the people who actually know how to write poetry. |